托福写作需要注意哪些环节呢？
发布时间：2022-10-13 15:27:23 已帮助：人 来源：北京优朗教育
Physical work can be a useful form of therapy for a mind in turmoil.Work concentrates your thoughts on a concrete task.Besides,it is more useful to workyou produce something rather than more anxiety or depression.
本段的主题句是段首句。本段的两个推展句均不能回答主题句中提出的问题。什么是"a mind in turmoil"(心境不平静)Physical work又如何能改变这种情况?为什么它能起therapy的作用?读者得不到明确的答案。
由于四级统考的作文部分只要求写一篇100～120个词的三段式短文，每一段只有大约40个词左右，因此，要达到完整就必须尽可能地简明。例如：
It is not always true that a good picture is worth a thousand words.Often writing is much clearer than a picture.It is sometimes difficult to figure out what a picture means,but a careful writer can almost always explain it.外语学习网
段首句所表达的主题思想是一种看法，必须有具体事例加以验证。上述两个推展句只是在文字上对主题作些解释，整个段落内容空洞，简而不明。如果用一两个具体的例子的话，就可以把主题解释清楚了。比如下段：
It is not always true that a picture is worth a thousand words.Sometimes,pictures are pretty useless things.If you can‘t swim and fall in the river and start gulping water,will you be better off to hold up a picture of yourself drowning,or start screaming"Help"?
Joe and I decided to take the long trip we‘d always wanted across the country.We were like young kids buying our camper and stocking it with all the necessities of life.Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie.We started out in early spring from Minneapolis and headed west across the northern part of the country.We both enjoyed those people we met at the trailer park.Joe received a watch at his retirement dinner.To our surprise,we found that we liked the warm southern regions very much,and so we decided to stay here in New Mexico.
本段的主题句是段首句，controlling idea(中心思想)是take the long trip across the country。文中出现两个irrelevant sentences，一个是Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie，这一段是讲的是Joe and I，中间出现一个Bella是不合适的。还有，Joe received a watch at his retirement dinner这一句更是与主题句不相关。考生在四级统考的作文卷上常常因为造出irrelevant sentences(不相关语句)而丢分，值得引起注意。再看一个例子：
My name is Roseanna,and I like to keep physically fit.I used to weigh two hundred pounds,but I joined the YMCA for an exercise class and diet program.In one year I lost eighty pounds.I feel much better and never want to have that much weight on my five-feet frame again.I bought two new suitcases last week.Everyday I practice jogging three miles,swimming fifteen laps,lifting twenty-pound weights and playing tennis for one hour.My mother was a premature baby.
本段的controlling idea是like to deep physically fit，但段中有两个irrelevant sentences，一个是I bought two new suitcases last week，另一个是My mother was a premature baby。
从上面两个例子可以看出，native speakers同样会造出来irrelevant sentences。卷面上如果这种句子多了，造成偏题或离题，那问题就更严重了。
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